
"You are dripping on my lovely new floor," said Rafal. Rhian blinked at the black stone tiles, grimy and thick with soot.
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Rafal Attempting To Use Slang In A Modern AU:
Rafal attempting to use slang in a Modern AU:
Rafal has joined the chat.
Rafal: I am insane. Unhinged. And mentally-ill. - RM
Agatha: Yes, that's true. What about it?
Rafal: I'm wicked.
Tedros: True again. Why are you stating the obvious?
Rafal: No, you misunderstand.Β I'm colloquially bragging like the youth do?
Agatha: Wut? Are you trying to say something we disagree on?
Rafal: Yes. I have a good argument too.
Rafal: Wait.
Rafal is typing.
Sophie has joined the chat.
Sophie: Apologies, darlings! I TOLD him not to go through my contacts! I've been trying to teach Rafal to keep up with the times asΒ of late. He means "sick," and "wicked" as in "wicked cool."
Tedros has left the chat.
Agatha: And you thought that would work?!!
Sophie: It was worth a try?
Rafal: How's this, my love? I'm DECEASED at the sight of these previous texts!
Sophie: ???
Rafal: ππππ
Sophie: What are you trying to SAY???
Rafal: Isn't it obvious? I'm LAUGHING at the princeling's idiocy.
Agatha: ...mood
Sophie: Oh. Slay.
Rafal: Whom?
Sophie: NO ONE. It means continue doing what you're doing because you're stylish and/or successful.
Sophie: He's right, you know, Aggie.
Agatha: Yeah... can't defend Tedros there.
Rafal: ππππππ
Sophie: ...We're never going to get him to give it up, are we?
Agatha: Nope
Rafal: These pictographic symbols are great. π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬
Agatha: π
Rafal: Look at my flock. Too bad there aren't any Stymph ones. π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬π¦ββ¬
Agatha: Ok, this is your problem now. Bye.
Agatha has left the chat.
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Trial run prompt thing: Does anyone get what I mean (in the way that I'm describing it or similarly) or does this sound strange?
It's nice to see someone articulate this actually, hence the fact that is is a reblog, of course.
(The thoughts of substance are in the tags, this time.)
does anyone feel the layer of plexiglass between themselves and the rest of the world or is that just a me thing
SGE Characters as Literary Things
(Not all of these are actual literary or rhetorical devices; some are just writing techniques, forms, genres, mediums, etc.)
This is a bit abstract, so Iβm curious about how subjective these might be. Does anyone agree or disagree? And feel free to make additions if you think I left anything out, or request another character that isnβt here.
Hopefully this makes (intuitive?) sense. As always, I'm willing to explain my thought process behind any of the things I've listed.
Also, anyone can treat this like a βTag Yourselfβ meme, if you want. Whose list do you most relate to, use, or encounter?
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LANCELOT (I knowβhow odd that Iβm starting with a minor character and not Rafal, but wait. Thereβs a method to my madness. Also, watch out for overlap!):
Metonymy, synecdoche (no, literally, to me, these are him.)
Zeugma
Analogy
Figures of speech
Slang, argot
Colloquialisms
Idioms
TEDROS:
Simile
Metaphor
Rhyming couplets
Rhyme schemes
Sonnets
Commercial fiction
Coming-of-age genre
Line enjambment
Overuse of commas
Cadence, prose speech
Waxing poetic, verse (not prose)
Alliteration
Kinesthetic imagery
Phallic imagery/sword sexual innuendos (sorry)
The chivalric romance genre
AGATHA:
Anaphora, repetition
Semicolon, periods
Line breaks
Terse, dry prose
Semantics (not syntax)
Elegy
Resonance
Consonance, alliteration
Pseudonym
Narrative parallels
Realism
Satire
SOPHIE:
Sophistry (yes, there is a word for it!)
Imagery
Italics, emphasis
Em dash
Aphrodisiac imagery
Unreliable narrator, bias
Rashomon effect
Syntax (not semantics)
Diction
Chiasmus (think: βFair is foul and foul is fair.β)
Rhetorical purpose
Provocation, calls to action
Voice, writing style
Rhetorical modes: pathos, logos, ethos
Metaphor
Hyperbole, exaggeration
Sensationalism, journalism
Surrealism
Verisimilitude
Egocentrism
Callbacks (but not foreshadowing or call-forwards)
Narrative parallels
Paralepsis, occultatio, apophasis, denial
Hypothetical dialogue
Monologue
JAPETH:
Sibilance
Lacuna
Villanelle (an obsessive, repetitive form of poetry)
Soliloquy
ARIC:
Sentence fragments
RHIAN (TCY):
Unreliable narrator
Setup, payoff
Chekhovβs gun
Epistolary novel
RHIAN (prequels):
Multiple povs
Perspective
Dramatic irony
Situational irony
Chiaroscuro (in imagery)
Endpapers
Frontispiece
Deckled edges
Narrative parallels
Foreshadowing
Call-forwards
Foil
Death of the author
RAFAL:
Omniscient narrator
Perspective
Surrealism
Etymology
Word families or 'linguistic ecosystems'
Latin
Verbal irony
Gallows humor
Narrative parallels
Call-forwards
Circular endings
Parallel sentences or balanced sentence structure
Narrative parallels
Foil
Juxtaposition
Authorial intent (βreturn of the authorβ)
HESTER:
Protagonist
Allusions
Gothic imagery
ANADIL:
Defamiliarization
Deuteragonist (second most important character in relation to the protagonist)
Psychic distance
Sterile prose
Forewords, prologues
Works cited pages
DOT:
Tone
Gustatory imagery
Tritagonist (third most important character in relation to the protagonist)
KIKO:
Sidekick
Falling action
Dedications, author's notes, epigraph, acknowledgements
Epitaph (Tristan)
BEATRIX:
Pacing
Rising Action
Climax
HORT:
Unrequited love
Falling resolution
Anticlimax
Malapropism
Innuendo
Asides
Brackets, parentheses
ClichΓ©
EVELYN SADER:
Synesthetic imagery
Villanelle
Foreshadowing
AUGUST SADER:
Stream of consciousness style
Imagery
Foreshadowing
Coming-of-age genre
Elegy
Omniscience
Rhetorical questions
Time skips, non-linear narratives
Epilogues
MARIALENA:
Diabolus ex machina
Malapropism
Malaphors, mixed metaphors
Slant rhyme
Caveat
Parentheses
Footnotes
MERLIN:
Deus ex machina
Iambic pentameter
Filler words
BETTINA:
Screenwriting
Shock value
Everything and anything you've observed, even abstract thingsβaside from the bird motif I already have an obvious tag forβis fair game, if anyone wants to send in an ask. Iβm curious to know your interpretations. (And I might give you a little spiel about the thing you send in, if anything ends up clicking in my head!)
if u pay attention there are themes and motifs on my blog
Round VIII of Excerpts from The One True School Master of Vault 41
I'm only dropping a few short snippets from the draft (currently at around 178 pagesβI haven't been doing much with it lately since the last update) because they connect in a very incorrect, misleading way, which I find funny, even if I already know the context with the redacted parts. Sorry (or not sorry)! Things aren't what they appear to be, and that's all I can say for now.
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[When I re-read this part, it occurred to me that I had possibly written an unintentional but legitimate burn.]
[...]
Rafal stared at her in the mask. βWhat are you wearing that for?β
βI-I felt strange, looking in the mirror. And well, the mask makes me feel less like youβ¦β
[...]
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Rafal had made up his mind. He would execute his plan, no matter the consequences.
[...]
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[...] Sophie really was timely. Or perhaps, she was watching him [...] The thought almost made him laugh.
[...]
"Death to the School Master!" He raised a fist, and led them to class.
"DEATH TO THE SCHOOL MASTER!" They chanted in unison.
All according to plan.
A Hypothetical TOTSMOV41Β Scene I've Talked Myself out of Writing
There's a scene in the draft of TOTSMOV41 in which Tedros punches Rafal in the face while wearing heavy, wide band, royal rings (I did a little sketch of the results here), and I'm soo tempted to have Rafal's first, instinctual thought be: how ineffective. And I could have him mock Tedros for the punch in such a condescending way that he'd just be asking to be punched again at that point. The subtext would drip with: look at me and what a fine target my perfect jawline would beβ
Rafal would beΒ evaluating the effectivenessΒ and the actual impactΒ of the punch, as if Tedros were one of his ineffectual Never students, thinking to himself that brass knuckles would've been better than mere rings. Should restock those in Evil's arsenal. Hmm... as if he weren't just punched in the face. Like, how non-reactive would that be?! It would not be immediate rage, but he would be operating on autopilot, due to all the other terrible things the narrative had subjected him to by that point, like he's blatantly apathetic.
The whole thing could be an absolutely scathing review of Tedros' punch, which he just finds pitiful, running through his mind, and besides, this pain is nothing in comparison to everything else that's happened to him as of late, so the pain doesn't even really register, at first, and he has a high pain tolerance anyway and he hasn't had a decent night's sleep in weeks, so what?
Thus, he just. Defaults to Evil professor mode. He's going on about the wind-up or the velocity of the act, and everyone's staring at him like he's grown a second head, and then, partway through, he realizes. He's instructing his sworn, mortal enemy. He's literally giving this young idiot pointers!
The idea strikes me as funny because it poses the question: what if Rafal were in teacher mode at the time? Alas, the whole thing is just so unlikely that I think I'll have to scrap the idea.
Unlessβhe's in a disoriented and dazed enough state for this type of thought process to occur, which could very well be true, considering the previous, slightly horrific things that happened to him. And yet, I think he's the type to always be alert, to land on his feet, to hit the ground running, etc., which again, wouldn't work too well for his character, unfortunately. And, well, there's probably enough humorΒ in that scene already (depending on how potential future readers will take it?) so nevermind.
I want to maintain the integrity of his characterization, but the comedy potential to be had here could be such fun to exploit (and he is sort of known for being under-responsive/unfazed)! So, instead of all this, which could potentially detrimentally slow down the pacing, Rafal will likely just get an awful, sardonic remark, as per usual. Ah well.
It could've been great otherwise, but this Rafal-lecturing-Tedros scene might not work for the greater purposes of the story. Rafal is probably too self-aware and not quite "absent-minded professor" enough, and thisΒ scene wouldn't have fit the tone, so that's why I'm scrapping the idea and posting it here instead. (If I can manage to have it both ways, with the sardonic comment and his lecture, I may put it in, but the current outline/draft as it is will likely not use this at all.)